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Post by Jacob Simons on Apr 13, 2016 19:49:17 GMT
The mysterious Bob Whines There was once a boy who loved cars. His name was Bob Whines. He was funny, but not always funny he could also be rude to. He was twelve years old and was living with his dad. He lost his mom a year ago in a car crash. He went to boarding school because he was very troubled, and had Dyspraxia which was a difficulty with fine motor skills, he also had Dysgraphia which was a difficulty with writing. He only had one friend, and will only have one friend, and that friend was Percy Jackson. They have been friends since Bob came to that boarding school in grade four because he got kicked out of three other boarding schools. He desperately wants to stay at his new boarding school. He is tall, he has blond hair, he has glasses, he is fast, and he looks like he walks like a goat. Although Bob is a little odd Percy is still his best friend and always will be his best friend. In Winter he loved to throw snowballs at anything he could, and in Summer he loved to dig holes in people's path to trip them and watch from a bush and laugh when they trip and fall over. He hated Spring and Fall and nobody knows why he hates Spring and Fall. He is a very mysterious boy.
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Post by Chloe on Apr 14, 2016 16:08:54 GMT
really good job! I liked the part where you said he digs holes to watch people fall into them. it reminded me of holes
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Post by Lila on Apr 14, 2016 16:09:53 GMT
I loved your story! The way you added the detailed words and how you put your sentences in chronological order amazed me. The way you described him made me imagine what he looked like and his personality and what he would do. Love it!
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Post by Nathaniel on Apr 14, 2016 16:14:19 GMT
watching people fall into holes?!really!GOOD IDEA JANKEEZ!
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Post by courtney on Apr 15, 2016 15:27:24 GMT
wow loved your character!! The way you described him and the way you told what role he would play in the book and the way you described his personalty. Great job!!
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Post by Liv on Apr 15, 2016 15:32:23 GMT
cool funny and i like the part that he looks like he walks like a goat
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Post by Chloe on Apr 15, 2016 15:36:28 GMT
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